Tunnel of Love--NON-ENTRY

Discussion in 'CAW SS - April 2019' started by Ashley Cooper, Apr 14, 2019.

  1. Ashley Cooper

    Ashley Cooper Active Member

    This was first written in a challenge to myself, an attempt to capture an entire, erotic vignette in the minimum 750 words allowed by literotica.com. Now that I’ve found WRIST I’m thrilled to discover others who appreciate the potential power of super-short stories, and took advantage of the slightly longer word limit to adapt the story to the April theme. Remember, the brain is the biggest sex organ! This is the last pre-written story I have, but I’m feeling the “bug” to write more; I know this series has at least one if not two more chapters before it’s finished. Please tell me where you go with the characters in the comments section. The stories can stand on their own, but make the most sense if read in this order: Ferris Wheel, Fun House, Tunnel of Love. I look forward to all comments; I'm posting here even though it's a non-entry, only because the supporting stories are also here. Hope that's ok, and apologize in advance for the cliff-hanger ending!

    I haven’t yet written any of the next part of the story—what do you think should happen next? Please tell me where you go with the Micah and Caleb in the comments section.
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    After erotic interludes at the county fair’s Ferris wheel and Fun House, Micah and I entered Ye Old Mill, where a paddle wheel’s current pushed swan-shaped boats through dark, intricately twisted channels.

    As with other rides that night, this one had no line; the county fair was near the end of its annual appearance. Late April in the Midwest was known for fickle weather, so organizers of events like this were famous for scheduling lesser venues like ours for weeks when the turnout might not be stellar. It was no surprise that the operator perked up when we approached.

    “Here, I thought I’d already had tonight’s last customers. Climb right on in, young lady,” he said, lifting up the swan’s wing/door.

    Micah slid into the seat, her back to the platform. I handed over our tickets, and $5, motioning toward the paddle wheel control with a twist of my hand, indicating that I wanted it slower. He winked, pocketing the money and doing as I’d asked.

    “Have fun, you two!”

    I put my arm around Micah’s shoulders as we drifted into darkness, reveling in her clean, feminine scent and the softness of her skin. Neither of us knew what to expect from the ride itself. I thought of it as the “Tunnel of Love” because everyone called it that, but saw quickly that it was “Ye Old Mill” when the first animated diorama showed a happy family grinding flour. We both paused our kissing to say “What?...” before we plunged into darkness again.

    In the dim light, I saw Micah’s dark hair and substantial, but not overwhelming, breasts outlined by a beautiful silk shirt. Her sharp blue eyes and porcelain skin tone were hidden in this light, but were burned into my memory. Life was good.

    I honestly don’t remember the next dioramas, as I loosened several buttons of her shirt, and she responded to my kisses on her neck. I was emboldened when she let me fold one cup of her bra underneath the breast it protected. I leaned in for my first taste of a girl’s nipple, thrilling at its immediate rise under my tongue, the arch of her back, and the indrawn breath that accompanied it.

    Not sure how it had gotten there, I realized that her hand was inside my unbuckled pants, which were hanging open at the top.

    “Lift up for a second,” she said, her hands in the waistband of my underwear, “I want to try something.”

    The light came up as we approached another diorama, and she saw me looking longingly at the single breast exposed to me. She blushed, before folding the other cup down so I could now see both breasts. I would have thrown myself into a fire for her at that moment; I did as she’d asked, lifting my hips from the seat.

    She pulled both my pants and underwear down to my mid-thighs, leaving me even more exposed than I’d been earlier on the Ferris wheel, more exposed to a woman than I’d been in my life. I was nervous in several different ways at once, but also so sexually excited that I would have exploded at once if not for the earlier release she’d given me.

    “Promise you’ll still call me, after what we’ve done tonight,” she asked, “and you won’t tell your friends?”

    I nodded dumbly, certain that I would do whatever she asked, to keep this night on its current trajectory.

    She searched my eyes for truth, before saying “Here goes nothing...” and lowering her head to my lap.

    Call me a dumb country kid (it’s true), but I just didn’t know that the mouth could be used in sex. I entered Nirvana—swear to god—when her lips closed around my shaft. I’ve had blowjobs since then, obviously, but the novelty and unexpectedness of those sensations made this a time-machine sort of moment: if science ever discovers one, I’ll use it to re-live the joy, the lust, the amazement of that moment.

    I wish I could say I lasted a long time and that she had perfect technique, but I didn’t, and she didn’t, and it absolutely did not matter. My horizons expanded significantly as she moved her mouth along my length, her hand fumbling along my shaft and around my pouch. She must have been forewarned somehow of what to expect, because when my seed rocketed out of me, she was only partially taken by surprise. A fraction fell from her lips, before she smiled, swallowed again, and reached to kiss me.

    I recoiled at the thought, and panicked as we saw the end of the ride ahead. Her hurt look at my unwillingness to kiss her still haunts me today. As somewhat of a gift from the heavens, it came to me then that what I did next would have far-reaching implications for my future--if there was to be one--with Micah. I looked deeply into those china-blue eyes before responding, with my heart pounding, ....
     
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  2. tcs1963

    tcs1963 Well-Known Member

    A great trilogy, I enjoyed reading your work. Thank you
     
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  3. TakeMeDown

    TakeMeDown Well-Known Member CAW Finalist KAW Winner CAW SS Winner

    Young experimentation. So sweet.
     
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  4. Ashley Cooper

    Ashley Cooper Active Member

    @TakeMeDown perfectly phrased--I should probably make that the description for the series. It's exactly what I was aiming for here; who can't help but cheer for these two kids?!
     
  5. Redbeard1031

    Redbeard1031 Well-Known Member

    Your writing brings out the innocence of young love very well. I am looking forward in whats to come from your future writings.
     
  6. Ashley Cooper

    Ashley Cooper Active Member

    That’s exactly what I was aiming for; thank you for the kind words! This series needs at least one or two more chapters, then I hope to find time to write more long-form stories again.
     
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